Writing With Abandon

Reflections and ramblings about life as an educator, writer, reader, knitter, and over-thinker. Trying to do the writing only I can do.

An Excerpt

For today’s slice (day 9! wow!), an excerpt from my writer’s notebook entry yesterday.

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The sun dapples differently in the morning, the humidity still thick. The brown vines hang and sway from the branches of the trees, almost like they’re dancing in the wind. I can hear birds chirping and roosters clucking. Car engines as they drop children off at school.

What if you could mute the sounds one at a time?

Take away the white noise of the whooshing air on the highway. Take away the rumbling car engines. Take away the whistles from the rooftop.

Leave the air rustling the leaves on their branches. Leave the birds tweeting in the trees. Leave the rustle of pen and paper, children’s voices.

Blankets of pollen coat the benches, allergy culprits. Like fairy dust, causing sneezing and watery eyes.

M found a worm, inching along his leg. We gave him a post-it pack home.

“He has good abs,” M said. “I’m gonna call him squiggly.”

Comments

4 responses to “An Excerpt”

  1. writingandlaughing Avatar

    I love the imagery of taking away certain sounds and leaving the chosen ones. What a powerful way to shape a scene! Thanks for this slice today. ❤️

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  2. natashadomina Avatar

    What beautiful images! It truly feels like a glimpse into a slice of life. I love that line: “The sun dapples differently in the morning,” and M.’s comment about the inchworm is so cute!

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  3. amyilene Avatar
    amyilene

    This is gorgeous writing. I agree with other comments….that is a fabulous notion to consider: what would happen if you could mute sounds?

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  4. Debbie Lynn Avatar

    How creative…choosing to mute particular sounds. If only all that pollen was magical like fairy dust! It’s covering everything right now! I enjoyed a glimpse at your journal today. 🙂

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